Nights spilled into days
And the days would slosh,
Quick and messy against each other
My thoughts, helplessly dispersed among them
The bits of the shipwreck left of my consciousness
Floating aimlessly out at sea
*
And there is a creeping panic within me
Often skimming along my spine
With cold fingers of dread
The menacing prospect of stagnation
And the possibility of failure
*
Time keeps its ledger in rigid order
Clean brief strokes of precious seconds
Never to be recalled
Each second, a grain of heavy sand
Building upon the others,
A castle of my life,
Of my past, my decisions
Of my actions, my inactions
Of my hesitant existence
*
Whether in the end, that it may crumble
Only to be washed away, like the many turrets had,
Or that it may tower over my mistakes,
Depends on how I spend and place
The grains of sand
That I now hold loosely
In my hands
© Devina S.
It’s very well written, describing you standing at the beach, picturing a storm day and night, like a nightmare coming down your spine, exams and school, your everything and your castle in your present life, which always feel out of control, slipping through your fingers that fail to grip them. I wish you all the best. It’s already a poem, so I don’t feel like altering any word in it.
I like the fact that you can’t even relax at the beach. Doesn’t that describe how you were really into your poem when you wrote it? It’s like you were out of yourself somehow.
Very nice metaphor! Good piece!
Thanks, Joe! How are you feeing about this Sunday’s Picture it an Write?
Such a beautiful visual and descriptive writing. Wow. Loved the lines of “nights spilled into days and the days would slosh”… My favourite part.
You are so good, my dear.
Oh my goodness, Chatty, nearly forgot you came by. Thank you! I do hope the winds favour you to where you fly 😉
Oh that’s ok, I’m flying around in circles!
I really enjoyed this! Thank you.
No, my friend, thank you! I appreciate the follow, though let me tell you, at the moment I’m quite taken up with my exams but after that I’ll be around more often.